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06 March 2011

Six Sentence Sunday 3/6

It's that time again! Sunday Six! Remember to visit all the participants here!

This Sunday's six comes from Duality, since y'all seem to be enjoying it so well. Hopefully you read the tab to get a sense of what's going on overall. In this snippet, our fearless (ok, scared to death) MC is about to undergo her first combat exam, the Endurance Chamber, in which she'll have to fight four different opponents in four simulated environments. She's not ready, but James wants her in it anyway. The test uses virtual reality to simulate the opponent's natural habitat. It is do or die.

           
All I could see was swirling sand that invaded my nose and stung my face. I opened my mouth and tasted its grittiness. Blinded and already battered, I was helpless.


Finally, the sands died down enough for me to open my eyes. On a small mound of sand only a few yards away stood a tiny fox-like creature.


A fennec? I asked myself. A fennec is going to kill me?
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37 comments:

  1. An Open BookMarch 6, 2011 at 5:47 AM

    Great visual and love the suspense

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  2. Roberta WalkerMarch 6, 2011 at 6:35 AM

    I am so looking forward to reading the whole novel once it's pubbed!!!! I'm giving SSS a go (unofficially). Check mine out at www.frobertawalker.blogspot.com

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  3. Lisa FoxMarch 6, 2011 at 9:56 AM

    How interesting. I'd love to see more of this!

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  4. Keri FordMarch 6, 2011 at 10:06 AM

    Good Suspense!

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  5. Sandra SookooMarch 6, 2011 at 10:20 AM

    hmm now I want to know more!

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  6. Sarah GrimmMarch 6, 2011 at 10:29 AM

    Interesting six! Will we see more next week?

    ~Sarah

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  7. AnonymousMarch 6, 2011 at 10:34 AM

    Intriguing!

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  8. Patricia PrestonMarch 6, 2011 at 10:57 AM

    I wanted to read more!

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  9. Susanna FraserMarch 6, 2011 at 11:28 AM

    Ooh, intriguing! I want to know what happens next.

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  10. Jayel KayeMarch 6, 2011 at 11:40 AM

    It's those cute little creatures you have to watch out for...Jurassic Park anyone?

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  11. Rebecca RoyceMarch 6, 2011 at 11:43 AM

    I really want to read the whole thing!

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  12. Lindsay K.March 6, 2011 at 11:48 AM

    Great visuals there! I hate sand. lol

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  13. Chrystalla ThomaMarch 6, 2011 at 12:44 PM

    Very intriguing!

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  14. Jessica E. SubjectMarch 6, 2011 at 2:06 PM

    This is an intriguing six! I look forward to reading more.

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  15. Lauri J OwenMarch 6, 2011 at 2:24 PM

    Sounds like an awesome story. Can't wait to read more!

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  16. Taryn KincaidMarch 6, 2011 at 2:27 PM

    Great uses of the senses. Wasn't expecting a fennec. (Dunno what a fennec is, but expected something bigger and scarier than a small foxlike creature. Good build up. Good switcheroo!)

    How hilarious: my word verification word was "foxed."

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  17. Darcy DrakeMarch 6, 2011 at 2:28 PM

    Oooh I'm hoping for a fennec shape-shifter! Great six!

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  18. AnonymousMarch 6, 2011 at 2:52 PM

    well, of course fennecs are lethal! What is she thinking? ;-)
    Great six!
    Barb

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  19. Marie DeesMarch 6, 2011 at 3:43 PM

    Nice. I like the way the character's voice guides me in this world.

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  20. Edie RamerMarch 6, 2011 at 3:46 PM

    I'm intrigued and would want to read on.

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  21. lexcadeMarch 6, 2011 at 4:31 PM

    *Happy dance* Thanks!!!

    I'll continue this section for the next few weeks. Cuz it's fun for me.

    As Jayel said, it really is the little critters you have to watch out for ;)

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  22. VanessaMarch 6, 2011 at 5:44 PM

    Nice job! I really enjoyed this - and I would love to see what happens next!

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  23. Author Leanne DyckMarch 6, 2011 at 6:17 PM

    I'm there experiencing the sand, feeling the fear.

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  24. AnonymousMarch 6, 2011 at 6:41 PM

    I'd be asking: How sharp are its teeth?

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  25. L. A. GreenMarch 6, 2011 at 7:28 PM

    I can feel that stinging sand on my face. Well done. And her deadly opponent is...a cute little fox. Yeah, that would throw me off too, but I'm sure part of this test is to teach her never to prejudge a potential opponent. Great six!

    Another SF/R. Love it.

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  26. Hailey EdwardsMarch 6, 2011 at 7:42 PM

    The setting is vivid, and the touch of humor sets it off nicely.

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  27. AnonymousMarch 6, 2011 at 7:54 PM

    Very intriguing! I'll be back for more next week.

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  28. Laura KayeMarch 6, 2011 at 9:13 PM

    I'm echoing what others before me have said, but this is really intriguing!

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  29. Alanna CocaMarch 6, 2011 at 9:14 PM

    Love the suspense. More next week?

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  30. DevinMarch 6, 2011 at 10:53 PM

    I imagine the punch line is ... "Never underestimate a fennec!"

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  31. Miranda BuchananMarch 6, 2011 at 11:14 PM

    Oooh. Very interesting. I'd read more. :)

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  32. AnonymousMarch 7, 2011 at 12:02 AM

    This is really neato stuff.

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  33. lexcadeMarch 7, 2011 at 12:07 AM

    Thanks! I appreciate all your comments! *See previous post* Promise I'll have more for you next week!

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  34. Pip GreenMarch 7, 2011 at 1:41 AM

    I love it! That last line is so unexpected after the build-up. :)

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  35. AnonymousMarch 7, 2011 at 1:18 PM

    Love the grittness from the sand--nice work!

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  36. CasiMarch 7, 2011 at 8:58 PM

    It's a great description and promises a great fight.

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  37. Lucy FelthouseMarch 8, 2011 at 3:09 PM

    Intriguing. I love it! :)

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