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17 April 2011

Six Sentence Sunday 4/17


Merry Sunday all! Admittedly, I have totally slipped on the reading and the commenting. There are so many awesome stories and snippets and authors now. Will definitely do a better job this week. *Forgive me for being a slacker? :D*

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Without further ado, SSS from Duality. It follows immediately after last week's, and it kinda cheats. It's only 5 sentences but I reeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeally liked it.

I rose and followed her back into the lab, breathing deeply the lingering scents of desert plants and the crispness of the air. Without Jasper, I didn’t know what would happen. This woman, this White Coat, tried to blend with the group who wanted to ignore my existence when I wasn’t proving myself in their stupid physical exams. She wanted to pretend that she was on James’ side, but she wasn’t. Her scents—the longing, the hope, the fear, the concern—betrayed her before she even told me her name. 
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24 comments:

  1. UnknownApril 17, 2011 at 5:28 AM

    Nice.... Now I have to wonder why he has a strong use of his senses! Hooked again!

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  2. Sandra SookooApril 17, 2011 at 8:33 AM

    ooh nicely done! Loved it!

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  3. AnonymousApril 17, 2011 at 8:36 AM

    I'm intrigued and wanting to read more about him. Great six!

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  4. Laura KayeApril 17, 2011 at 8:46 AM

    Hmm...what or who is he that he can smell such scents--intriguing!

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  5. Roseanne DowellApril 17, 2011 at 8:55 AM

    very intriguing

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  6. Vivien JacksonApril 17, 2011 at 9:18 AM

    Fascinating character voice: definitely more or less than human, but easy to identify with just the same.

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  7. Lisa FoxApril 17, 2011 at 9:29 AM

    I love the set up of underlying tension and alliances. Nice!

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  8. Cate MastersApril 17, 2011 at 9:31 AM

    Love that she can smell feelings. Very cool. :)

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  9. Stacey KennedyApril 17, 2011 at 9:37 AM

    Oh wow! That was so so so good!

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  10. Sarah GrimmApril 17, 2011 at 9:45 AM

    Great job! Loved it!

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  11. Jayel KayeApril 17, 2011 at 10:00 AM

    wonderful and you were right. the five were terrific. I loved the use of her strong sense of smell.

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  12. Taryn KincaidApril 17, 2011 at 10:05 AM

    Ooh! I'm excited! I think I know who she is. (If not, you've done this well enough to get me thinking about it.) Last week when you just said "white coat" I wasn't sure if she was an experiment or one of the experimenters, but now...

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  13. UnknownApril 17, 2011 at 10:45 AM

    Very intriguing! Great six!

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  14. Rebecca RoyceApril 17, 2011 at 11:21 AM

    Very vivid writing

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  15. UnknownApril 17, 2011 at 11:30 AM

    Draws me right in. Like how much he's able to read from her w/o her wanting to give it away.

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  16. Roberta WalkerApril 17, 2011 at 11:35 AM

    Ah...White coat...A hint, perhaps? Nicely done! Makes me want to turn that page - darn - have to wait until next week!

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  17. Jessica KnaussApril 17, 2011 at 12:41 PM

    Yes, your snippets are page turners!

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  18. LindsayApril 17, 2011 at 12:58 PM

    Still hooked. Love ths woman, this White Coat. Add a suspense to the scene

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  19. lexcadeApril 17, 2011 at 1:27 PM

    Thanks, everyone :) Your comments have led to multiple happy dances today LOL

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  20. Gem SivadApril 17, 2011 at 1:33 PM

    Yes, the "white coat" really takes it to a new level. Like Roberta said, I want to turn the page and keep going. Great six!

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  21. Liana BrooksApril 17, 2011 at 5:22 PM

    Intriguing that he can smell her emotions so clearly. I'm quite curious what's going on. Good six.

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  22. AnonymousApril 17, 2011 at 7:55 PM

    Intriguing snippet...you certainly have my attention and I want to keep reading! ;-)

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  23. JApril 17, 2011 at 10:25 PM

    Ooh, great description, and I love how he knows what's going on with her without even knowing her name!

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  24. Pip GreenApril 19, 2011 at 3:08 PM

    I especially loved that last line, how those scents betrayed someone's true feelings.

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