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09 October 2011

Six Sentence Sunday 10/09


Hello, hello! It's that majestic time of year when the world erupts into a plethora of colors, pumpkin pie is on every menu, and football season is in full swing. I. LOVE. FALL. At least the beginning of it. The part that bows down to winter, meh, not so much. ;)



Welcome to this week's edition of Six Sentence Sunday! I'm glad I get to spend it with y'all, and glad that y'all chose to spend some of your time with me. Your comments make me smile. 

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My nose told me Sylvia was nearby; Lorenzo, however, wasn’t, and instead of the expected sense of relief, disappointment crawled through me like a turtle, covering every part of me. He’d saved me, like Jasper had wanted to, and I wanted to thank him. Most of all, he confirmed that somewhere locked inside me was a woman named Janelle, a woman who deserved to understand her fate. 

I closed my eyes again, wishing they’d leave Sylvia and me alone. I needed to know if Lorenzo had said my real name, Janelle. The familiarity of his voice whispering the name gave me hope.
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22 comments:

  1. Lisa FoxOctober 9, 2011 at 8:32 AM

    I love this six! So full of hope and longing.

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  2. AlixOctober 9, 2011 at 9:34 AM

    Great piece of writing. Well done.

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  3. Paula MartinOctober 9, 2011 at 9:43 AM

    Intriguing - definitely want to read more of this!

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  4. Sandra SookooOctober 9, 2011 at 9:53 AM

    Nice! Love the voice :-)

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  5. Cara BristolOctober 9, 2011 at 10:20 AM

    Intriguing six. There's a lot going on here.

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  6. Taryn KincaidOctober 9, 2011 at 10:48 AM

    Her confusion and yearning really come through here.

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  7. Jessica E. SubjectOctober 9, 2011 at 10:53 AM

    I agree! So very intriguing! :)

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  8. gemma parkesOctober 9, 2011 at 11:04 AM

    Great emotion, loved it!

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  9. Jessica KnaussOctober 9, 2011 at 11:54 AM

    Yes, I get a lot of hope and longing from this snippet. I hope it will all come out okay, and soon!

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  10. Sandra Renee PessoOctober 9, 2011 at 12:45 PM

    I love the reaction of expected relief to disappointment. Very moving six.

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  11. AnonymousOctober 9, 2011 at 12:49 PM

    Oooh, intense and intriguing! Nice six!

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  12. AnonymousOctober 9, 2011 at 1:12 PM

    Such a strong six xx Loved it

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  13. Monica Enderle PierceOctober 9, 2011 at 1:57 PM

    A powerful, longing voice and lots of conflict and intrigue. Great six.

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  14. LindsayOctober 9, 2011 at 2:35 PM

    Love your six.

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  15. D CarneyOctober 9, 2011 at 3:21 PM

    Intriguing six!

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  16. Carrie Ann RyanOctober 9, 2011 at 3:42 PM

    Oh, very nice.

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  17. Vivien DeanOctober 9, 2011 at 9:48 PM

    Very interesting. Thanks for sharing!

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  18. 1000th.monkeyOctober 10, 2011 at 3:54 PM

    I was really thrown by the 'disappointment crawled through me like a turtle...' line, 'cause if it's crawling through her (that's inside), it can't also 'cover' her (that's on top). Also, if it's crawling like a turtle, that's a very slow, plodding sensation... which is an image that seems to contrast the rest of the scene.

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  19. lexcadeOctober 10, 2011 at 4:27 PM

    Thanks, guys.

    Ya know, Monkey, I'm not really a big fan of that simile either... I'll have to fix that. Thanks!

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  20. Gem SivadOctober 10, 2011 at 6:53 PM

    So much happening in these six--to a woman "locked inside...named Janelle". Fascinating.

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  21. Layna PimentelOctober 11, 2011 at 8:12 PM

    Intriguing six.

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  22. Brien MichaelsOctober 12, 2011 at 11:38 AM

    There's so much emotion, here. I'm dying to know what happens.

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