06 March 2011

Six Sentence Sunday 3/6

It's that time again! Sunday Six! Remember to visit all the participants here!

This Sunday's six comes from Duality, since y'all seem to be enjoying it so well. Hopefully you read the tab to get a sense of what's going on overall. In this snippet, our fearless (ok, scared to death) MC is about to undergo her first combat exam, the Endurance Chamber, in which she'll have to fight four different opponents in four simulated environments. She's not ready, but James wants her in it anyway. The test uses virtual reality to simulate the opponent's natural habitat. It is do or die.

           
All I could see was swirling sand that invaded my nose and stung my face. I opened my mouth and tasted its grittiness. Blinded and already battered, I was helpless.


Finally, the sands died down enough for me to open my eyes. On a small mound of sand only a few yards away stood a tiny fox-like creature.


A fennec? I asked myself. A fennec is going to kill me?

37 comments:

Dawne Prochilo said...

Great visual and love the suspense

Roberta Walker said...

I am so looking forward to reading the whole novel once it's pubbed!!!! I'm giving SSS a go (unofficially). Check mine out at www.frobertawalker.blogspot.com

Lisa Fox said...

How interesting. I'd love to see more of this!

Keri Ford said...

Good Suspense!

Sandra Sookoo said...

hmm now I want to know more!

Sarah Grimm said...

Interesting six! Will we see more next week?

~Sarah

Kerrianne Coombes said...

Intriguing!

Patricia Preston said...

I wanted to read more!

Susanna Fraser said...

Ooh, intriguing! I want to know what happens next.

Jayel Kaye said...

It's those cute little creatures you have to watch out for...Jurassic Park anyone?

Rebecca Royce said...

I really want to read the whole thing!

Lindsay K. said...

Great visuals there! I hate sand. lol

Chrystalla Thoma said...

Very intriguing!

Jessica Subject said...

This is an intriguing six! I look forward to reading more.

Lauri J Owen said...

Sounds like an awesome story. Can't wait to read more!

Taryn Kincaid said...

Great uses of the senses. Wasn't expecting a fennec. (Dunno what a fennec is, but expected something bigger and scarier than a small foxlike creature. Good build up. Good switcheroo!)

How hilarious: my word verification word was "foxed."

Darcy Drake said...

Oooh I'm hoping for a fennec shape-shifter! Great six!

creativebarbwire said...

well, of course fennecs are lethal! What is she thinking? ;-)
Great six!
Barb

Marie Dees said...

Nice. I like the way the character's voice guides me in this world.

Edie Ramer said...

I'm intrigued and would want to read on.

lexcade said...

*Happy dance* Thanks!!!

I'll continue this section for the next few weeks. Cuz it's fun for me.

As Jayel said, it really is the little critters you have to watch out for ;)

Vanessa said...

Nice job! I really enjoyed this - and I would love to see what happens next!

The Sweater Curse said...

I'm there experiencing the sand, feeling the fear.

diannehartsock said...

I'd be asking: How sharp are its teeth?

Laurie A. Green said...

I can feel that stinging sand on my face. Well done. And her deadly opponent is...a cute little fox. Yeah, that would throw me off too, but I'm sure part of this test is to teach her never to prejudge a potential opponent. Great six!

Another SF/R. Love it.

Hailey Edwards said...

The setting is vivid, and the touch of humor sets it off nicely.

heatherthurmeier said...

Very intriguing! I'll be back for more next week.

Laura Kaye said...

I'm echoing what others before me have said, but this is really intriguing!

Alanna Coca said...

Love the suspense. More next week?

Devin said...

I imagine the punch line is ... "Never underestimate a fennec!"

Miranda Buchanan said...

Oooh. Very interesting. I'd read more. :)

thejissilly said...

This is really neato stuff.

lexcade said...

Thanks! I appreciate all your comments! *See previous post* Promise I'll have more for you next week!

Pippa Jay said...

I love it! That last line is so unexpected after the build-up. :)

lbdiamond said...

Love the grittness from the sand--nice work!

Casi said...

It's a great description and promises a great fight.

Lucy Felthouse said...

Intriguing. I love it! :)

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