Taking a break from Duality for my wip Spark. I promise I'll jump back into Duality next week. I just kinda need a break while waiting for a few critiques.
This is from the second chapter--new characters: Riona and Sven. Riona works with Duke as a paranormal investigator and is also a Nephilim. Sven is a demon, currently an actor, who has been after Riona for around 700 years. They rarely get this close. She came on set to talk to him about the attempt on his life. He's asked her to meet him at his hotel later.
Riona followed his eyes. Everyone around them was preoccupied. Slyly, Sven slid his hand around her waist, pulling her close. She gasped at the sudden contact and shivered again at his warm breath on her skin. “When you arrive, head to the back of the building. There will be a door to my room.”
Now, go check out my fellow Sunday Sixers! I promise you'll find some awesome stuff waiting for you ;)
Now, go check out my fellow Sunday Sixers! I promise you'll find some awesome stuff waiting for you ;)
24 comments:
Suggestion, response, scenery and great dialog. Very good six!
Lots going on in these six. Great job.
Great six! I want to read more!
Anticipation...!
(Like this and also looking forward to more of Duality. Choices, choices.)
So fantastic. Really well done.
Such anticipation. Loved this 6
Interesting characters - 700 years - oh my how the time flies :D
700 years old. Bet he knows a few tricks that aren't in the book
I think I'd like to enter that door as well. I love it!
Very good six! Intrigued.
700 yaars? About time they got close. LOL. Great six.
Wow, a proposal for a hotel rendezvous with a millennial demon? Who wouldn't? ;)
ooh, makes me want to know more!
Good six. What's in his room?
Interesting six.
700 years? Good things come to those who wait, I suppose.
Okay, I know I'M already at that door!! Now what? :)
Ooh, I have a soft spot for demons, so I'm rooting for him. Get her, Sven!
I'm torn. On one hand, 700 years is a long time to make a guy chase you. On the other hand, I believe in playing hard to get.
She should bring someone along just to be a brat. :o)
Fun six!
The 'slyly' makes me suspicious. Does she want to be alone with this man? Hope we get to find out.
Sensual promise. Yum.
Great six.
Best,
Allure Van Sanz
fast paced six with the promise of secrets and adventure. Loved it and really, really wanted to read on to find out what would happen after she walked through that back door.
Love the 'will she, won't she?' cliffhanger on this. But poor guy ... er, demon ... waiting 700 years?! That's keen.
Lots of history between those two! Should make for lots of conflict!
You're going to stop there?! You tease!!
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