09 October 2011

Six Sentence Sunday 10/09


Hello, hello! It's that majestic time of year when the world erupts into a plethora of colors, pumpkin pie is on every menu, and football season is in full swing. I. LOVE. FALL. At least the beginning of it. The part that bows down to winter, meh, not so much. ;)



Welcome to this week's edition of Six Sentence Sunday! I'm glad I get to spend it with y'all, and glad that y'all chose to spend some of your time with me. Your comments make me smile. 

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My nose told me Sylvia was nearby; Lorenzo, however, wasn’t, and instead of the expected sense of relief, disappointment crawled through me like a turtle, covering every part of me. He’d saved me, like Jasper had wanted to, and I wanted to thank him. Most of all, he confirmed that somewhere locked inside me was a woman named Janelle, a woman who deserved to understand her fate. 

I closed my eyes again, wishing they’d leave Sylvia and me alone. I needed to know if Lorenzo had said my real name, Janelle. The familiarity of his voice whispering the name gave me hope.

22 comments:

Lisa Fox said...

I love this six! So full of hope and longing.

Alix said...

Great piece of writing. Well done.

Paula Martin said...

Intriguing - definitely want to read more of this!

Sandra Sookoo said...

Nice! Love the voice :-)

Cara Bristol said...

Intriguing six. There's a lot going on here.

Taryn Kincaid said...

Her confusion and yearning really come through here.

Jessica Subject said...

I agree! So very intriguing! :)

gemma parkes said...

Great emotion, loved it!

Jessica K said...

Yes, I get a lot of hope and longing from this snippet. I hope it will all come out okay, and soon!

Sandra Bunino said...

I love the reaction of expected relief to disappointment. Very moving six.

sarahballance said...

Oooh, intense and intriguing! Nice six!

kerriannecoombes said...

Such a strong six xx Loved it

Monica Enderle Pierce said...

A powerful, longing voice and lots of conflict and intrigue. Great six.

Lindsay said...

Love your six.

Dee Carney said...

Intriguing six!

Carrie Ann Ryan said...

Oh, very nice.

Vivien Dean said...

Very interesting. Thanks for sharing!

1000th.monkey said...

I was really thrown by the 'disappointment crawled through me like a turtle...' line, 'cause if it's crawling through her (that's inside), it can't also 'cover' her (that's on top). Also, if it's crawling like a turtle, that's a very slow, plodding sensation... which is an image that seems to contrast the rest of the scene.

lexcade said...

Thanks, guys.

Ya know, Monkey, I'm not really a big fan of that simile either... I'll have to fix that. Thanks!

Gem Sivad said...

So much happening in these six--to a woman "locked inside...named Janelle". Fascinating.

Layna Pimentel said...

Intriguing six.

Brien Michaels said...

There's so much emotion, here. I'm dying to know what happens.

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