18 September 2011

Six Sentence Sunday 9/18

Hello again! Thank you for spending part of your Sunday with me. I appreciate the support and comments. Sunday is my favorite day of the week just because I know I get to spend it with some super-talented writers!!! 

Still in Duality this week, and probably will be for a while. Today picks up after last week's, with Dima's anticipation for her opponent.

The sixteen, the python/black widow hybrid was my last opponent.
Scratching and hissing at the door sent waves of fear down my spine to my tail. I bristled so hard it hurt. My claws dug into the floor; my heart pounded in my ears; every drop of blood rushed through my trembling body. 
The door slid open. I vomited, shaking and coughing so much I nearly collapsed. 

23 comments:

Jessica Subject said...

I love how you've thrown in character description (for both characters) along with emotion. Well done!

Lisa Fox said...

Intense! What a crazy battle this has been!

Joanne Stewart said...

Very intense!!! Great snippet!

Zee Monodee said...

Wow! This powerful - totally hits you in the guts! Great job

Cherie Marks said...

Yikes! That's an intense scene! Great six!

Xakara said...

Good gods, that's intense! Great choice! :)

~Xakara
A Way To A Dragon's Heart 6SS

Sandra Sookoo said...

Nice! Love the intro to battle :-)

Taryn Kincaid said...

Wow.Intense & graphic. This ms really is somethng!

Sarah Grimm said...

Great six! Very graphic.

Lindsay said...

Great prelude to the battle

Gem Sivad said...

Nervous anticipation for sure. Great six!

Alix said...

Fantastic six, I'm hooked on this story

lexcade said...

Thanks for the comments everyone! I soooo appreciate it :)

Stacey said...

Intense and vivid! Nicely done!

Chrystalla Thoma said...

Fascinating - I wonder what sort of creatures these are and why they are fighting... Great six!

Cara Bristol said...

Intense and descriptive. I like how you combine the description with action. Good job.

Kharisma Rhayne said...

oooo vomiting -- awesome descriptive 6 :)

sarahballance said...

Definitely intense! This is quite a snapshot. Great job!

Piper said...

I can feel the intensity. Way to engage the reader. Loved the six! Great job.

1000th.monkey said...

Very nice! I especially liked the last line!

...I was a bit confused about your first sentence though... do you mean the python hybrid is her sixteenth opponent? if so, the second word of that line should be 'sixteenth', not 'sixteen'. Also, need another comma after 'hybrid'.

Or do you mean there are sixteen of the python hybrids? If so, then no comma and 'hybrids' should be plural.

I think it's the former though, rather than the later...

Dee Carney said...

Holy smokes! The tension!

lexcade said...

Thanks, guys!

Monkey, the number is actually its experiment number. The python/black widow was the 16th combination the scientists created. Hopefully that makes sense....

J.A. Beard said...

Great tension.

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