17 April 2011

Six Sentence Sunday 4/17


Merry Sunday all! Admittedly, I have totally slipped on the reading and the commenting. There are so many awesome stories and snippets and authors now. Will definitely do a better job this week. *Forgive me for being a slacker? :D*

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Without further ado, SSS from Duality. It follows immediately after last week's, and it kinda cheats. It's only 5 sentences but I reeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeally liked it.

I rose and followed her back into the lab, breathing deeply the lingering scents of desert plants and the crispness of the air. Without Jasper, I didn’t know what would happen. This woman, this White Coat, tried to blend with the group who wanted to ignore my existence when I wasn’t proving myself in their stupid physical exams. She wanted to pretend that she was on James’ side, but she wasn’t. Her scents—the longing, the hope, the fear, the concern—betrayed her before she even told me her name. 

24 comments:

Kathleen Grieve said...

Nice.... Now I have to wonder why he has a strong use of his senses! Hooked again!

Sandra Sookoo said...

ooh nicely done! Loved it!

graylinfox said...

I'm intrigued and wanting to read more about him. Great six!

Laura Kaye said...

Hmm...what or who is he that he can smell such scents--intriguing!

Roseanne Dowell said...

very intriguing

Vivien Jackson said...

Fascinating character voice: definitely more or less than human, but easy to identify with just the same.

Lisa Fox said...

I love the set up of underlying tension and alliances. Nice!

Cate Masters said...

Love that she can smell feelings. Very cool. :)

Stacey Kennedy said...

Oh wow! That was so so so good!

Sarah Grimm said...

Great job! Loved it!

Jayel Kaye said...

wonderful and you were right. the five were terrific. I loved the use of her strong sense of smell.

Taryn Kincaid said...

Ooh! I'm excited! I think I know who she is. (If not, you've done this well enough to get me thinking about it.) Last week when you just said "white coat" I wasn't sure if she was an experiment or one of the experimenters, but now...

Gayle said...

Very intriguing! Great six!

Rebecca Royce said...

Very vivid writing

Eleri Stone said...

Draws me right in. Like how much he's able to read from her w/o her wanting to give it away.

Roberta Walker said...

Ah...White coat...A hint, perhaps? Nicely done! Makes me want to turn that page - darn - have to wait until next week!

Jessica K said...

Yes, your snippets are page turners!

Lindsay said...

Still hooked. Love ths woman, this White Coat. Add a suspense to the scene

lexcade said...

Thanks, everyone :) Your comments have led to multiple happy dances today LOL

Gem Sivad said...

Yes, the "white coat" really takes it to a new level. Like Roberta said, I want to turn the page and keep going. Great six!

Liana Brooks said...

Intriguing that he can smell her emotions so clearly. I'm quite curious what's going on. Good six.

laynap said...

Intriguing snippet...you certainly have my attention and I want to keep reading! ;-)

J.Rose Allister said...

Ooh, great description, and I love how he knows what's going on with her without even knowing her name!

Pippa Jay said...

I especially loved that last line, how those scents betrayed someone's true feelings.

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