Merry Sunday all! Admittedly, I have totally slipped on the reading and the commenting. There are so many awesome stories and snippets and authors now. Will definitely do a better job this week. *Forgive me for being a slacker? :D*
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Without further ado, SSS from Duality. It follows immediately after last week's, and it kinda cheats. It's only 5 sentences but I reeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeally liked it.
I rose and followed her back into the lab, breathing deeply the lingering scents of desert plants and the crispness of the air. Without Jasper, I didn’t know what would happen. This woman, this White Coat, tried to blend with the group who wanted to ignore my existence when I wasn’t proving myself in their stupid physical exams. She wanted to pretend that she was on James’ side, but she wasn’t. Her scents—the longing, the hope, the fear, the concern—betrayed her before she even told me her name.
24 comments:
Nice.... Now I have to wonder why he has a strong use of his senses! Hooked again!
ooh nicely done! Loved it!
I'm intrigued and wanting to read more about him. Great six!
Hmm...what or who is he that he can smell such scents--intriguing!
very intriguing
Fascinating character voice: definitely more or less than human, but easy to identify with just the same.
I love the set up of underlying tension and alliances. Nice!
Love that she can smell feelings. Very cool. :)
Oh wow! That was so so so good!
Great job! Loved it!
wonderful and you were right. the five were terrific. I loved the use of her strong sense of smell.
Ooh! I'm excited! I think I know who she is. (If not, you've done this well enough to get me thinking about it.) Last week when you just said "white coat" I wasn't sure if she was an experiment or one of the experimenters, but now...
Very intriguing! Great six!
Very vivid writing
Draws me right in. Like how much he's able to read from her w/o her wanting to give it away.
Ah...White coat...A hint, perhaps? Nicely done! Makes me want to turn that page - darn - have to wait until next week!
Yes, your snippets are page turners!
Still hooked. Love ths woman, this White Coat. Add a suspense to the scene
Thanks, everyone :) Your comments have led to multiple happy dances today LOL
Yes, the "white coat" really takes it to a new level. Like Roberta said, I want to turn the page and keep going. Great six!
Intriguing that he can smell her emotions so clearly. I'm quite curious what's going on. Good six.
Intriguing snippet...you certainly have my attention and I want to keep reading! ;-)
Ooh, great description, and I love how he knows what's going on with her without even knowing her name!
I especially loved that last line, how those scents betrayed someone's true feelings.
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